Praise

"[...] epitomizes what a good first-person POV story could be. It's tricky to get first-person right without it sounding like someone is talking at you and instead, we literally feel that we are literally this character; we are living this story. Very rich on not only their internal struggles but their experiences and seeing the world so it ties in that world-building, it was brilliantly done."

"The author would occasionally come down to this one-word paragraph [...] and the way that they paced that and used the repetition effectively you almost felt yourself huffing and puffing as you went with it. It was tense; it was good!"

"You definitely have some skills there, so you keep that up, please! I would like to read more so please submit again!"

"Truly gripping descriptions of the horrors of war. You wove past and present so expertly, blending them sometimes as if occurring simultaneously. PTSD is laid out on these pages--injurious, haunting, scarring. Well done."

"The premise of this story is great, and I appreciate how you've broken up the structure, formatting the final section as a kind of epilogue. You do a great job of teasing out a mystery and the plot twist at the end was very effective."

"Beautiful sensory detail: The scent of the spices, the sun shining, the breeze blowing through the colored flags, and the sun's glint on the hairbrush the man has in his back pocket, I think the theme of this story is an important one. Often, justice begins with awareness, followed by small acts of courage, and kindness. Creative use of the title to have two meanings. Also, ties in with the justice theme."